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 Drifting Echoes  [ASR]
A Veterans Day poem
by Prosperous Snow celebrating
Review of Drifting Echoes  
Review by Choconut
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Prosperous Snow celebrating ,

I am reviewing this on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . It is also part of "I Write in 2019" .

Please remember these views are purely my own and any advice is given with the sole intention of being helpful.

First Impressions: I love the direction you took this prompt. It's clever and moving and a little different. My first impression is: I really like it.

Voice/Tone: The tone is thoughtful and reflective. Everyone will know what you're describing. We have all experienced this, either on TV or in similar situations from our own lives.

Rhythm: There is a great rhythm and pace in this poem. It feels as though it lingers over the important phrases you want us to remember. I love how the word "drifting" is set on its own line. It's poignant.

My Favourite Part: These lines are so emotive: "The sound of taps echo / the tears." I love the repetition of the phrase "the sound of taps."

Suggestions: Just one typo. It comes directly after the lines I mentioned above: "if those who survived." I think it should be, "of those who survived."

This is a fantastic poem. It creates a sad picture in your reader's mind, a relatable picture. It's incredibly moving. I really like it.


Keep writing!

Choconut

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