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I don't really know. I was just writing for fun, enjoy it.
by Rosie
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Review by Jeannie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Rosie


It is my pleasure to read your story and give you a review. This is my welcome to WDC review. I can't wait to see what you title your piece. Good Job for just writing for fun.


*Sun*Reader's Reaction: WOW! Talk about a story that makes you think, this is it! It brought so many questions to my mind. Why is she seeing pictures of her life flashing before her? What happened that made this happen? Was she is an accident? Showing the family must mean they were with her, so what happened to them? I really think you should write a short story on what happened to this main character.

*People* Characters/Dialog: The character wasn't really defined, just an image of someone watching pictures of their life flashing by.

*Tree2* Emotion/Mood/Atmosphere: The emotion is wonder, am I alive or dead? Why is this happening?

The mood/atmosphere shows the author to be experimenting with an idea. She's created many pictures of events that happened throughout this main character's life. They say this happens when you are about to die.

*Lightning2* Plot & Pace: The plot revolves around the author's "I don't know, I was just writing for fun so enjoy it. This reader did!

*Burstv*Structure - setting & Imagery: The narrative structure created a plot of wonderment. She shows dramatic action in her mind, determining the key a conflict, setting, and event.

*Rain* Favorite Lines: "There is always that moment before a disaster. Like the eye of a storm. It becomes quiet, everything stops, and all you can think of is ‘What if?’. ‘What if’ I didn’t suggest for a family vacation. ‘What if’ I focused on the road instead of my phone. What if, What if, What if."

*Idea* Overall Impression/Conclusion: Interesting beginning that makes you read on.

The conclusion left me wanting more. Ending with a question made me wonder if you are going to continue on this

*RainbowL*WriteOn!*RainbowR*


*ExclaimG* Thank you for sharing your work with us! *ExclaimG*

Jeannie
I love the color purple! When I saw this one at Leger's shop I bought it.

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