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Review #4514450
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by ruwth
         Review for entry/chapter: "Outside My Window..." 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, ruwth ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" . *Smile*

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Squirrel* Aw, nuts! *Squirrel*
         *Acorn* I don't really see anything that needs correcting, though you might want to try uncapping the beginning lines, for the sake of flow, but that's just my own thinking.
         *Acorn* The word "seen" is okay, but I'm wondering if another word might replace it, such as viewed or eyed or something similar to strengthen the image perhaps?

*Fox* Goodies *Fox*
         *Cookie* This visual could be me staring out my own window the past few days!
         *Cookie* I loved the alliteration.
         *Cookie* You've done a great job following the rules for a Haiku!

*Owl* Things to Hoot About! *Owl*
         Snow flurries and sleeting rain,
         Great visual and flow! Best of luck in the contest!

*Leafbr* Have a great day and...*Leafbr*
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*

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