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 | Things that go Bump in the Night  [E] As you do your morning routine you listen to the news. Something isn't right...  |
| (4.5)| It is my pleasure to read your story. I saw your story title, "Things that go Bump in the Night." Interesting title, description is intriguing so I thought I would give you a "Welcome to WDC" review.  Reader's Reaction: An interesting beginning, many questions that need answering. The main character is worried about something that makes him wonder what happened - When listening to the news a missing man's name rings a bell, but isn't sure if he met him anywhere. This makes the reader wonder right along with him. Good job! Characters/Dialog: The main character is well defined. The reader finds him alone with his thoughts, wondering why he feels that something is not right. Emotion/Mood/Atmosphere: The emotion expressed is contemplative-studying, thinking, reflecting on an issue.The mood/atmosphere is Atmosphere referred to a dreaded feeling that something awful happened and the main character can't remember exactly what. Great description of backgrounds and settings, setting the stage that something bad is happening or already happened.  Plot & Pace: The plot revolves around the main character, doing his morning routine, listens to the news and something makes him remember an incident, but not exactly sure why the missing person reported on feels familiar.The pace is set just right, not giving too much away, keeping the reader guessing.  Structure - setting & Imagery: The narrative structure Narrative structure follows the plot made clearer as the story unfolds. Dramatic action describes what the main character is feeling, the reader follows along with him, who determines the key conflicts within his thoughts. Favorite Lines: Think about it. You hear bumps. You hear thumps. You hear pounding. Perhaps you're simply afraid of your heart, because you know what comes next. You feel it growing inside you. Its claws are ripping at your intestines, wanting desperately to escape. To overpower you. To control you. But you can't let that happen. You can't. You know what happens next though. It always happens next. Overall Impression/Conclusion: It's amazing how the author makes the reader feel sorry for the main character. He's so confused, and I wondered what made him fear his own shadow? He's done such horrible things that his brain cannot connect to the person he's really become.The conclusion is well written, and I think all along that I was expecting to be shocked.  WriteOn!  Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jeannie   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 11/17/2019 @ 11:14pm EST