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by ruwth
         Review for entry/chapter: "~ The Little White Church ~" 
Review by Cubby
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, ruwth ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" . *Smile* This is one of the extra credit reviews.

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Squirrel* Aw, nuts! *Squirrel*

         *Acorn* Just a few minor things, nothing explosive. *Bigsmile* In Paragraph 3, the last two sentences include the word them four times.
         *Acorn* In Paragraph 4: Miss Simons room. *Right* Miss Simons's room.
         *Acorn* In your last paragraph, you wrote: she looked so happy to be in Jesus. you mean to write "into" instead of "in"?


*Fox* Goodies *Fox*

         *Cookie* I loved the size of your font, your easy flow, and the imagery. You set the stage with no complications at all. I remember our pastor from the Methodist church used to call the children up after (or towards the end) of the service, which included my own children at that time. Thank you for bringing up that memory. Another memory you stirred within, was that my grandma used to have a felt-board on an easel with a cardboard cutout of Jesus with children around His feet. Yes, such a nice, warm memory. *Smile*

         *Cookie* Have you thought about writing for children? I get that vibe you would be good at it. Have you ever read "Keys for Kids" devotional magazine? I've had several devotional stories published through them years ago. You might want to look into it, if you're interested. *Smile*

         Just out of curiosity, is Teedy a nickname for another name? I've never heard of it before but I like it. *Smile*

*Leafbr* Have a great day and...*Leafbr*
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*

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