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Harvest Time  [13+]
A 24 Syllables contest entry
by Mastiff
Review of Harvest Time  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Christmas tHiNg

What brought tHiNg meandering in a space time continuum over to your port?

*Cow* You posted before me in I Write in 2019. It is always my pleasure to read your work, Mastiff .

What does tHiNg think about while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea* I thought about how you convey a lot in this short, 24 syllable poem. The first part is idyllic, how it should be and how we would all love it to be.

The last line, with the shoving to get to the food, is more realistic from my experience. This is how the young ones tend to behave at times. But in the years to come they will remember it with mist in their eyes just like I do now. I know I wasn't such a dream child all the time when company came for holiday dinners. Quite in keeping with that last line.

What does hooves moo and tHiNg applaud about while reading your item?

I like how you manage to impart a lot of things on your reader with few words. Each word is well chosen and I guess that is the point of doing the 24 syllable thing, to get to the heart of the matter with just a few words.

Well done in doing that! Happy holidays to you and yours.

*Thumbsup*

HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. tHiNG a.k.a. 4ps

P.S. My reviews are designed to be encouraging. They are not detailed editing forays or harsh critical lectures because that is not what I like to do. Since I still have a bit of an unruly kid in me, I tend to do what I enjoy.

I think we would all do better to do what we enjoy here and elsewhere, but that's just me.

Making a Difference (I hope it's a positive one) One Review at a Time in 2019! *Cow**Balloons**Type*

Ta Ta until we meet again in another place and time....

"Avoiding Toothless Rabid Bullies & Such" 


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