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Hi Jenae,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Andie's opinion of one of her neighbors. This makes the reader wonder what might be going on the apartment building. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main character very well for the reader. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The woman in Andie's apartment speaks like a real person. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)Andie glanced toward the too thin, boyishly figured woman who stood just outside the open door to her apartment and-There should be a comma after "apartment".

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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