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Hi Mason,
This is a wonderful essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about ADHD and how it is viewed by society. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)I myself am trying to sit down and write paragraph,-Should read "I, myself, am trying to sit down and write a paragraph,"

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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