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 The Boardwalk  [13+]
It's not such a normal walk home today, is it..?
by MusicalTayo
Review of The Boardwalk  
Review by Angus
In affiliation with Cross Timbers Groups  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Musical Tayo!
This isn't bad for one of your 1st pieces on here. I like the concept of the water and the sun turning this dark red, but I think you should show a little more fear in the man. And I know YOU know you left it incomplete, which is something you stated in your port intro.
Something else I saw in there was that you're 'not feeling good enough to be in this world anymore'. PLEASE don't feel that way! Every person has a purpose to be here, and we're all just as important as the next person!
Smile, my friend! *BigSmile* You don't say how old you are, but I have a feeling you're young. If so, then don't let those feelings bring you down! We've all been there, done that, but trust me, things will get better and please know that these feelings are only temporary!
I'll try to read "Identities"  either today or tomorrow!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Musical Tayo, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

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HAPPY HOLIDAYS!

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