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  |  | Wheel of Fortune  [18+] My blog--I pull a card--if it doesn't speak to me...perhaps it is for you?  |
| (4.5)| Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier , I am reviewing this on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . This is also part of "I Write in 2019" . Please remember these views are purely my own and any advice is given with the sole intention of being helpful. First Impressions: I love the image this poem leaves me with. It is one of light and possibility. It feels warm and positive. I love the idea of the multiverse that holds everything and everyone ever made. Mechanics: This poem is free verse, which works well for a poem with so few syllables. One thing I did notice: it actually has twenty-five syllables. I've counted it a few times, to make sure. But, there is definitely one too many for the contest. However, it doesn't affect the poem. It works really well like this. Rhythm: The internal rhymes you use in this poem make it read smoothly and give it a great pace. The rhymes of mind with light and coalesce with multiverse are a great way to make the poem pop off the page. My Favourite Part: "I would burst into starlight." This image is so vivid. The use of the word burst when describing light is perfect. This is a great, little poem. I enjoyed reading it, and it has left me feeling a little lighter. Nice work. Keep writing! Choconut     My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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