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 The Proposal  [E]
I planned it out in detail - what could go wrong?
by Norman
Review of The Proposal  
Review by Nixie
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Norman.
Nixie here, dropping off a review from "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 


First impression
At first glance, all I saw was perfection. Maybe the title was a little weak, but the brief description sounded so funny, I was hooked. Excellent job creating an effective hook.

Reading on
Second glance, I saw the length of the poem and puzzled over why so many stanzas were required. The idea of something unique sounded like an adventure. The presentation was aesthetically pleasing. The bold font brought bravado and confidence to the words. The font size itself pleased me. I didn't have to squint.

Diving in
Now I was ready to throw myself into the deep end. The first stanza was the set up, which trailed to the second, to the third sentence and last with an easy flow and compelling temptation to read more. The lack of punctuation also added to the pleasant rhythm.

The plot thickens
I admired the character for his strength and integrity. He wrote out the proposal long hand! I'm not sure that's possible for me, which is scary. The simple rhymes continued, leading the reader further and further to see how the scenario played out.

Then the huge mistake, and surely that meant the end of everything. My heart went out to the man. The description of what happened to the intended fiancee was easily pictured in my mind. I'll admit to laughing at her plight.

But she's a woman of fortitude and shows some pluck. I think the couple will have a wonderful and balanced marriage.

Turn me around
The twist toward the end was totally unexpected. It struck me as odd that the guy didn't bring a real ring. Maybe he was super smart and correctly worried the valuable ring might meet with disaster.

Personal connection.
When my son went down on one knee in a restaurant to propose, his intended kept saying 'what are you doing on the floor? stand up. you look ridiculous.' *Laugh*

Lasting impression
Top off the poem with (I won't mention the spoiler) and the I knew I was right. This couple belonged together for however long forever lasts.

~Nixie

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