*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4524138
Review #4524138
Viewing a review of:
 Fear  [E]
The feeling of fear when you are alone in darkness.
by Vjay
Review of Fear  
Review by Angus
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Vjay!
This isn't bad for a short horror piece. The idea isn't all that unique though, and the ending seemed a bit rushed. We really don't know what happened to the one who was chasing, or even why he was chasing.
There was also a lot more telling than showing in this, which you could fix with some more description. Here's a link for information about that: ""Telling" Vs. "Showing" - Part 1" 
As for your English, yes it's broken, but it's not so bad that we can't read it. Oddly enough the spelling and grammar were pretty good!
Keep on writing on, Vjay, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

GROUP
The WDC Angel Army  (ASR)
Dedicated to promoting positivity, encouragement, and support to the WDC community.
#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

PSSS-If you want more exposure for your items you can put them on the Please Review Page or The Shameless Plug Page under Community on the left hand side.

Angus Hand

*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
   *NoteR* You have not yet responded to this review. Ignore
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4524138