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| (4.5)   Greetings, J.L. O'Dell! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2020" .   First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.What I Liked  I had to look up the definition to lenity, which I learned means gentleness; kindness. I not only enjoyed this 24 syllable piece, but now know a new word!  And it's even a word I could easily use in my vocabulary without sounding over-the-top for my speaking level.  You've provided a syllable count per each line, which makes it nice for the reviewer. I like how you've used this prompted word in this poem titled TOUCH. I especially like how you ended this piece with the word caresses. It's such a lovely word that ties in well with smooth touch, gentle kisses, and of course, lenity. Fabulous!Suggestions to Consider The only distraction I felt, was your punctuation. You might consider omitting the period in the second line and replacing it with a comma, then uncapping the T in the third line. It might flow a little smoother, but it's entirely up to you, of course! Final Thoughts This is a gentle, soothing read, about what a touch can bring. I love the title image, too! Very nice, indeed.  Have a great day and...K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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