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| Greetings, Writers_Cramp! This is actually pretty good. I don't know if you've ever seen Stephen King's Tommyknockers, but there's a scene in it that is quite similar to this in regards to the computer printing things by itself, only in the movie it's an old typewriter. But what's even stranger about this is I wrote a story just the other day (my last one!) that is almost identical to this! It was for the Newsfeed Challenge, but I swear I didn't copy yours! I don't work that way! But it even has the same title, but changed just a bit to match the storyline. It's only 500 words, but if you'd like to check it out, it's "The Dead Line"  Sorry, I digress. As I said, this is good! You did a great job with the descriptions, and even though the ending was a little ambiguous since we don't know what exactly happened to Joe, it's still a good ending. Sometimes fictional stories are better left that way, or even meant to end that way. On the other hand, maybe Joe himself was 'deleted'! If that's what you were going for, then kudos on that! Flawless spelling and grammar (but considering your background as a newspaper journalist, I think that was to be expected), and the whole story flowed smoothly. As for your ability to write fiction, I think this a fine example of it! You may have to work at it, but don't we all, regardless of what type of writers we are? You just might have to work a little harder. One tiny niggle (sorry to be so picky, but spelling and grammar are pet peeves of mine, even though I sometimes get lazy doing reviews): ‘the location of the mouse, the printer(,) but could not determine why the printer’ Otherwise, bravo! Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Have a wonderful new year and a fantastic new decade! PS-I run a horror contest "SCREAMS!!!" and I asked some of my contestants to read and review this. Can't promise that they will, but I tried!PSS-And thanks for the 150 GP 'reward', but I don't really need them. It was pleasure enough just to read this!
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