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OFF-CUTS!  [XGC]
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by Laurie Razor
         Review for entry/chapter: "Crock O' Dial" 
Review of OFF-CUTS!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: XGC | (5.0)
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Hi there, Laurie!
I can't believe I haven't read this before, but I'm glad I have now!
Like all of your other pieces, this one is really cool! And great!
I like the idea that your MC is toying (perhaps inadvertently) with Gwenda while he's pretends to be crippled, and having her fall off the cliff and him feeling guilty for not saving her was a good plot device.
I also enjoyed how the MC stumbles across her sister and eventually finds BOTH of them luring him into 'their' fire. That was a 'nice' way to end it.
Now your wishes will be granted and you'll feel happy, right?
Right? *Smirk2* *Laugh*
Well done as usual, my friend!
0ne tiny niggle:
'but fear overwhelms me as they turn (and) slowly prance through the treacherous glow unharmed'
Kee ponw ritin gon, Laurie, and I hope to see you entering "SCREAMS!!!"  more in the future! We miss you!

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