Hello {suser:omstar],

As a co-participant in "I Write in 2020" , it is my pleasure to review your contest entry.


Overall Impression:


Use of the Prompt:
I went back to the contest you wrote this item for to see what the prompt was, and by the end of the story, you did explain why the woman is naked. Well done. And funny, too.

Grammar and Mechanics:
It was very clear that the misspelled words was the poor woman stammering, half asleep, dazed and confused.

With this particular contest, since it is strictly dialogue, sometimes it is helpful to the reader when each speaker's lines are modified. For example, the policeman's words might be in one color and the womans ina different color. Spaces between lines also help with reading ease.

Closing thoughts:
Over all a good entry, entertaining. Good luck in the contest!


Thank you for sharing your work.
Kindest Regards, Lilli

***Disclaimer***
The comments herein are just my humble opinions. Use whatever is useful; discard the rest. I'm not an editor, proof-reader, or any of the like. When I read and review, I am reading as a 'reader', to be entertained. I look to see how the piece makes me feel and if I can I visualize the story/poem in my head. You know your work better than anyone else! If I make a suggestion or a comment, it is meant in the spirit of 'helping' and I welcome the same when people review my work.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .