*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4524811
Review #4524811
Viewing a review of:
 
Hold on Tight!  [ASR]
A young chair finds a new friend...
by IceSkatingSugarCube
Review of Hold on Tight!  
Review by Nixie
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Hi Ice Cube. Nixie here,
dropping off a review from
A beautiful Simply Positive Reviewing Signature


I'm happy my eyes skipped over the brief description. The puzzlement encouraged my mind to engage. A long time I sat here, wondering. The thought of my dad in a wheelchair came to me. It was awful. They parked everyone in a room with a tv, alarms set to screech if the person tried to stand up. To see my strong dad in such a horrible light crushed me. Not much later, he died.

Now, a positive spin to fill my mind. Of course I understand the personification, but it did my heart good to imagine wheel chairs having a personality. I hope my dad's was happy to ferry him about.

My favorite part was the one wondering if anyone one would take it for a thrill ride. And I still didn't make the connection. What a joy for it to fulfill a wish. Did it always think all kids were plastic dolls? That would make sense in light of the chair's limited perception.

Her eyes were giant, pale moons that shimmered with excitement.

I struggle with commas. A comma replaces the word 'and'. Adding and to the sentence: Her eyes were giant and pale moons that shimmered with excitement.'

My preference is without the comma, but it's a grey area. Author's discretion.

A lovely and vivid scene concluded the story with positivity. Thanks for the read. *Bigsmile*

~Nixie








*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
   *NoteR* You have not yet responded to this review. Ignore
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4524811