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 Welcome To The Dinosaur  [E]
A cute kids poem about the menu and clientelle of Rhydens Dino Diner
by Holly Wogan
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Okay, this is a cute kid's story wrapped in a poem. Unique too! The rhymes are uncomplicated and easy for a child to understand. If there's any confusion, how much fun would it be to teach children about dinos? Priceless. Hey, I'm a grown-up and appreciated the humour.

Tech: I like how all the lines are balanced and even. It makes a clean presentation.
It's so silly, but I keep thinking dinosaur-er to make the match perfect. *Laugh*

Some authors center their poems so they not scrunched to the left. At least I think that's why they're centering them *Laugh* For what it's worth, I center mine, but only after seeing members writing poetry. (I'm no poet.) Some poets do not capitalize the first word of every line. Especially is it's a continuing sentence. As is my way, poet's discretion, of course. I didn't understand why 'eat' in the fifth line was capitalized.

For easier reading, I suggest breaking this up into some separate stanzas, if that appeals to you.

Extensive extension to include so many types for animals. Otherwise, the poem would probably be tedious.

I fell for the entire poem Ha-ha on the last line. *Smile* At least humans would not be considered food! I wonder what green stuff they offer for Vegans? Hopefully not leaves.

It stretches the imagination to draw a vision in they're head picturing any of these critters with the dexterity to cook, but it's a fun concept to entertain. It's something my grandsons like to do with their stretchy plastic lizards and frogs.

All in all, the poet delivers exactly what was expected. Nicely done.

~Nixie












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