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Review of Made of stone  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Konnichiwa, Dalimer!
For such a short piece, this is actually pretty good. I love twisted endings, and you delivered with this!
I’m not sure where those voices, sounds, and that scene with the dancing and the fire came from (from some potential buyers(?) in the chamber?), but I know you were limited with the word count, so I can’t fault you for that. The idea that the stone had a ‘Medusa’ effect on you and turned you into a statue was what made this shine.
Me thinks you could expand on this one day! And now that I think about it, I’ll probably set tomorrow’s prompt for old stories that were never entered or needed to be ‘fixed’. Not that I think this needs to be fixed, but I think it would work better if it was longer.
Comments and suggestions:
prestigieus should be prestigious (I know that doesn’t look right, but I checked it!)
Dthalma is spelled Dhtalma the 2nd time
Ten-thousand(s)?
Otherwise, good job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Good to see you writing and entering "SCREAMS!!!"  again!

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PS-I don’t know if I replied to your latest email or not, but please don’t worry too much about your writing ‘droughts’. We all go through them, some more than others, but don’t try to force it. I know from personal experience that if it’s not coming to you, the harder you try, the more likely you’re not going to write well. In other words (no pun intended), it needs to come naturally!

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