Hello flyfishercacher ,

As a co-participant in "I Write in 2020" , it is my pleasure to review your contest entry.

Overall Impression:
This is a really great story and you did a wonderful job with its delivery!

Title / Description / Hook:
Your title and description are very good. It does a good job setting up the context of the story and what the reader can expect. The first paragraph was very good and I noticed how those same words can be applied today.

Flow:
This story has a lot of info and paints a vivid scene and yet with only 506 words! The flow is well done, never making the reader feel as though they are being rushed through the piece.

Scene/Setting:
There is no description of the scene or the timeframe - but, it's not really missed at all. Taking into consideration the subject matter and the mention of the gallows - it's pretty obvious. However, if you ever wanted to extend this story, expanding on the setting would have a huge impact on your readers.

Characters:
The main character is nameless and the story is told from her perspective. This character is likable and I feel sad for her plight. I love the way you had her scan the crowd and tell the reader a little about each of the people there. That was really interesting and enriched the story a great deal.

Dialogue:
The only dialogue, "Hangman, do your duty." was words that catch in the throat. It marks the end of the story and the life of the character.

Emotional Content:
There were so many scenes just like this that played out in real life. That makes this a sad, sad story.

Grammar and Mechanics:
No spelling or grammatical errors noted. I did spot a few occurances of dashes and emdashes.
I'm wondering if other punctuation or phrases could deliver the impact you are trying to convey with those.

Closing thoughts:
I think you did an awesome job with the prompt and I enjoyed the story! Best of luck withe contest!


Thank you for sharing your work.
Kindest Regards, Lilli

***Disclaimer***
The comments herein are just my humble opinions. Use whatever is useful; discard the rest. I'm not an editor, proof-reader, or any of the like. When I read and review, I am reading as a 'reader', to be entertained. I look to see how the piece makes me feel and if I can I visualize the story/poem in my head. You know your work better than anyone else! If I make a suggestion or a comment, it is meant in the spirit of 'helping' and I welcome the same when people review my work.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .