Hi Holly,
This a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker weil have a life filled with diversity. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a young woman who is influenced greatly ber grandmother's culture and language. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.