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Review #4529382
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 The Phoenix  [E]
a poem about holding on.
by zwolf
Review of The Phoenix  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Bon jour, Zwolf, and happy 14th *Shock2* ‘birthday’ on here!’
I’m no expert on poetry, but for as short and simple as this might be, I thought it was pretty good. And it says a lot for so few words.
Life is indeed a struggle, from the moment we’re born till the moment we die. And unfortunately, with that struggle comes pain. You did a nice job here of telling us that no matter how much life gets us down, don’t ever give up, even in our darkest hours.
Curiously enough, now that I just wrote that, I’m realizing that this hits home a lot harder than I thought. I graduated in ’83 from a class of around 60 kids (Weed, CA is a small town), and of those 60 classmates, I honestly can’t tell you how many of those have taken their own lives. Last I knew of, it was at least 8, and it wouldn’t surprise if it’s in the double digits by now.
My point is, for whatever reason, they apparently ‘gave up’. They didn’t rise from the ashes as this piece speaks of with the phoenix.
Sadly, they did ‘fly to the heavens, even though I know that’s not what you meant by that.
We have to be strong, no matter how many obstacles some higher power puts in our way.
Well done, my friend.
One suggestion in otherwise very good piece:
‘Rise stronger then before,’ (I’m pretty sure that should be ‘than’)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Zwolf! Thank you for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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