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Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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G’day, Sleepy Serpent!
This is good! The problem is I’m a terrible reviewer, so I’m not sure what to say about it. *Headbang*
The way I see it is Joe is being held prisoner to write a horror story, a genre he’s not familiar nor comfortable with, and until he produces a good enough story he will remain a prisoner in this dungeon as Mimi watches over his progress.
But here’s the twist (again, as I see it): not only is Joe being held prisoner to write this story/play, he’s being held prisoner to himself because he doubts his own talent.
And in the end, consciously or not, he has written his ‘own final act’.
One thing I wondered about was those italicized parts. Were those Joe’s thoughts, or were they part of the story he was writing? Methinks the latter, but I’m probably wrong.
As I said, I’m a terrible reviewer. Sometimes (probably a LOT of times) I see things in a story that aren’t even there, or that the writer didn’t mean at all. In other words, I could be completely off base in my review, so if that’s the case, I apologize!
Comments and suggestions:
‘The fossil was unearthed, sloppy, but his story did indeed exist. Still wet from birth, its coos and cries were an undeniable fact.’ (Damn! This sentence is golden, my friend! One of the best metaphors I’ve seen in a while! *Thumbsupl*)
‘Upon the first sniff, he smelled of metal(,) but the closer he got, the more it stank of blood.’
Great job, SS!
Kee ponw ritin gon, SS! Please! Have a fantastic day, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author! *Thumbsupl*

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