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 | MATCHBOX UNDIES  [13+] What was the one thing my Barbie's wardrobe lacked??  |
| (5.0)| Bon jour, Sandra Lynn! First off, I love the friendly and humorous way you told this! I was either smiling, laughing, or both from practically the 1st word to the last! You're not much older than I am, and I also went through somewhat of a similar 'doll' stage with my G.I. Joes. We went into a lot of battles together, shooting the bad guys and making our way through the jungles as we dodged enemy bullets, and just generally being tough dudes. Which is what I like about your story. It's kind of a story inside of a story as you tell about your own adventures with Barbie. Luckily for us guys, we didn't much care about our wardrobe, unless of course it came with a bazooka or a machete or a machine gun.  But I think it's great that your Grandma B., the one you never would have suspected, would go to all that trouble to make those homespun outfits for your Barbie. That in itself was neat, but then to make undies for her too?  I don't have to tell you that Joe always 'ventured forth commando style', but Barbie?It's a shame that they got lost in the wrapping, but I'm wondering if you've ever thought about marketing your Grandma B.'s idea? You gotta admit, it's pretty original! But you might have to get her permission, lest she sue you for copyright infringement!  Great job, Sandra Lynn! Comments and suggestions: 'I did not relish spearing my vulnerable fingers on the sharp and bobbing needle.' (Here, here! My grandmother, who raised me for the most part, spent a lot of time on her old manual sewing machine, and I wouldn't go near that darn thing!)'Off with her head applies to an uncooperative Barbie.' 'enough footgear to rival Imelda Marcos herself' My only suggestion would be to put this in a larger font and possibly double space the paragraphs (just to make it look a little more polished. A really nice piece like this should have some 'flare', so to speak.) Kee ponw ritin gon, Sandra Lynn! It was a pleasure to read, and congratulations on your promotion to Preferred Author! BTW, you're only 6 years and 10 days older than I am! Geminis rule! 
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