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Connect  [13+]
Everyone has a monster inside. (Social Conditioning and Oppression)
by Lilliy Loidd 🪔
Review of Connect  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi, Lilliy Loidd!
As lover, reader, writer, and judge of horror, I thought this was really good! I really enjoyed the subtleness and the simplicity of it as you tell us of these inner 'demons' (and demons can have many definitions! *Wink*) you're trying to free.
What's more is that you're speaking the truth! We ALL have demons inside, and it is indeed exhausting trying to hold them back!
But that last line summed it up perfectly! It reminds me of horror/comedy movie which I can't think of it at the moment. *Headbang*
Comments and suggestions:
'Shouldn't the monsters be allowed to play occasionally?' (So true, so very true!)
Also, I think you should put this in a larger font, perhaps 4.0. Not all of us on here have 20/20 vision, myself included.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! It was a pleasure to read, and welcome to WdC! If you like to read, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

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