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 Positivity  [E]
A change in outlook.
by bandit
Review of Positivity  
Review by SB Musing
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello bandit !
This is your local and frolic like Sb here. I stumbled across your port and chose this item to review for The Angel Army. Let's get rolling!

Corrections/Suggestions

*NoteW* First impressions- I can definitely agree that positivity is a thing and way to be right now. So, your poem drew me in from the start of it and I find it an easy and quick read.

*NoteP* I would say you could also expand on this poem if you wanted to. If you want it to be a shorter poem it can, but you could also go further with this poem and subject if you wanted to.

*NoteB* wallers in death and deceit-

I think that wallers might need to be wallows. Just a suggestion for you.

It's not hard-

There needs to be an apostrophe in-between the t and s. Just a little typo fix.

little positivity, not the crap on TV-

I would suggest a comma in-between positivity and not just to give it a sense of break between these two. Just a suggestion for you.

*Heart*Things Which I Enjoyed
I really enjoyed the concept of this poem especially in the times that we are in right now. Positivity is a wonderful thing and can help someone just brighten their day and feel better. Like it says inside of your poem it can be as simple as sharing a smile to someone that is lacking in smiles. The simplistic times stated in this poem are definitely wanted and needed during this time.

Overall Comments
Overall, there are a few things I'd suggest playing or tinkering with if you wanted to. Also, a few typos and word fixes for you, but I enjoyed the concept of this poem and doing the good thing, kind thing, and positive thing in sharing smiles and wishing for more innocent times. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D

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