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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello there!

This is my personal view of the piece. The suggestions below and purely that: suggestions.

*Penw* Impression:
Vivid, strong imagery. A powerful message of the struggles that come with cutting connections or letting go. I love that the connection is portrayed as a small bird, alluding to frailty.

*Penw* Structure:
Mostly quads throughout, as death approaches, the lines go to three then one, a nice touch. I liked the rhythm as well.

*Penw* Favourite(s):
"vanes charred by fire unseen"
"Lurking, loathsome, leeching."
"I bleed, or I remain in tenebrosity."


Write on and prosper!

Cheers,
Lilliy

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