Hello 🌑 Darleen - QoD } !

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First impressions- This is a very strong poem that takes the challenge, and the prompt, and flips it on its head. You take on the neighbor as a good form and definitely show the other side of it. There are lines in here that just grip you and don't let you go. This has to be one of the most powerful poems that I've read in awhile in reference to this type of subject. You even use the instances of rhyme to heighten this even more for us.

I didn't see any typos, rhythm issues, or what have you to fix with your poem.

Things Which I Enjoyed
as his smile stretched
up beyond his nose.

There's almost a shark-like thing I see going on with this. This first stanza sets up everything for this poem. Like dominoes meant to tumble and we're supposed to watch fall and not be able to catch them. There's such power in these lines with each one adding to the strength of it. This isn't a poem of feel-good or feeling like you're clean after the mention of neighbor with this poem. It's beautiful and both heartbreaking at the same time.

Overall Comments
Overall, this is a poem that catches you and delivers you with that first stanza. Then, you keep reading and it keeps building up afterwards until the end where we know that it doesn't just end with this. You handle it eloquently and strongly with each word, each line and stanza. This takes the prompt of the week and definitely turns it on its head. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D



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