Hello 🌑 Darleen - QoD !

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Corrections/Suggestions

First impressions- This poem has a lot of love, pining, and passion behind it. I love how this poem starts and builds just like a fire turning into a bonfire. You use the metaphors so well with this poem and definitely use it to your advantage. The first few lines pulled me in and definitely kept me enthralled with it. The second stanza of the stubbly chin was a great way to create a visual, and a sensation for us to sense while we read this.

Nothing to fix or change with this poem. It moves smoothly and quite well from one line to the next. It's a pleasure and pleasant to the ear.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I cannot see the curve
of that manly chin--
stubbled, as we sin,

Though I could definitely highlight a lot more of this poem that I enjoyed and definitely found enthralling and exciting to read. The next stanza and the tightness of the lines I like how that accentuates the tightness of you guys together. I like how you use single and double spacing to your advantage with your poem. I can feel the closeness with that mid stanza and it adds to the anticipation and the excitement as its read.

Overall Comments
Overall, this is an exciting and well written poetic piece that screams romance, desire, and need. You do a great job taking the poetic devices, metaphors and things and using it to strengthen the message even more. I get a lot of enjoyment reading your poetry so I'm happy you added this piece. You have a wide range of dark, complex, loving, desire, and all ranges of tones and emotions to explore in this book. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D



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