Hello I only came for tacos !

I'm here with "The WDC Angel Army"  for this review. Let's get rolling!

Corrections/Suggestions

First impressions- Wow, this is seriously a fantastic piece of poetry. It has such a strong voice to it. The repetition you use with certain lines totally works and strengthens the message. You have messages of being in the corporate world, of being alone, of being okay and not being okay. Of being brave and not lonely. I think that I would like to highlight this poem on a Newsfeed blast I do on my port and through the Newsfeed. I'd love others to read this peace of yours.

Nothing to really tinker or play with this. You could shorten maybe some lines and if you wanted take non-essential words out. But, honestly, there aren't too many of those when I look over this again. You could also use punctuation with this to create actual breaks in certain lines. But, this is poetry, so punctuation can be used, or not. I've read poets who have used it, and then others who haven't letting their lines continue. It's a personal preference.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I am not a disappointment
I am just me
A beautiful way to end this poem. There's heights with this poem, it takes you to lows and then back up high again. You use metaphor and emotion well with this. It was a nice, quick, easy read but with some profound lines inside of it too. You poetically did a great job with this.

Overall Comments
Overall, only very small things to play with this poem of yours. Puncutation is a thing of preference, and there aren't too many words to toy with this. It's a beautiful peace and was quite a joy to read to be honest. I will save it in my Notepad on my computer and then like I said I'd like to feature you in a Newsfeed blast so you might get some more feedback. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D



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