Hello Artisou !

I'm here with "The WDC Angel Army"  for this review. Let's get rolling!

Corrections/Suggestions

First impressions- This is a great quick little poem and says a lot with a few words. I like the sound of "violet dance" and the words seem to dance with the rhythm while reading it. There seems to be a daulity going on this this poem, false and ideal, and I like the start of this. It almost reminds me of a dual happening but with words.

I did notice a typo with this:
"Too many possibilities."

To, should be too in this sentence.

Things Which I Enjoyed
A recital of truth

Of many axioms.

Nice usuage of words to create metaphors to strengthen what you've written. I think that this is a good job for a poem inspired by your friend. I liked how the second to last line is saying bathed in intrigue and this plays off the false and ideal and then you finish with the possibilities. Everything seems to play nicely off of each other with each line adding to the dialogue of the poem.

Overall Comments
Overall, this is a good poem that the lines add well to each other as you keep reading. You just need the typo fix of 'to' being too' for the last line which is a simple fix with things. You also did a good job with your rhyming where it didn't feel like you forced the rhymes or rhymed because the words had to rhyme. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .