Hi, 💙 Carly , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Homecoming"  for "I Write in 2020" .

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Arlynn slipping into town. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and the tension.

I like: I like the way tension was built through the active descriptions.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I am giving this story a 5.0 because of the way it builds tension.








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