Hi Liv,I
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker will find help for her emotional problems. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a girl who is trying to enjoy summer with her friends while being unsure about here mental wellness. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to use commas before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.