Hello Ned ,

Congratulations on completing all of the June activities and qualifying for the July mini challenge in the Promptly Poetry Contest!

I popped over to your portfolio's folder to see if there was something I wanted to review for my part of the mini challenge and this poem of yours caught my eye.

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I love haiku form poetry and yours hit the spot. I enjoyed your poem and could envision the scene you painted with your words.

You did a great job with the Promptly Poetry Challenge prompt for a poem about a color.


MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:
Your syllable count is perfect.

My favorite line of your poem was: "silver fingers stretch and stroke" but I love the whole thing and thought the ending was perfect. Both a surprise and yet also a harmonic match for the rest of the poem.

Your poem is well written, flows nicely and evoked strong feelings in me as I read it.

I liked how you structured your poem.

I didn't notice any mistakes of any kind in your poem.

I liked beauty and conciseness of your poem.


CONCLUSION:
You wrote a beautiful haiku poem that I greatly enjoyed reading. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your lovely poem with the writing.com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler




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