Hi cherry rose,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the imminent death of your mother, and the emotions you experienced during this time. While the reader is so sorry for your pain, they are delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to end questions with question marks. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.


You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.