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Review #4557352
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Little Poems - Haiku - Tanka - Etc  [E]
A place to share my little poems, haiku, tanka, than bauk, 24 Syllable, etc
by Tinker
         Review for entry/chapter: "Clouds" 
Review by Cubby
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Tinker! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2020" . *Smile*


*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.


What I Liked

         *Bullet* You followed the Mondo rules to a T. *Smile*

         *Bullet* I love the summer in the darkness description, referring to masks and marches! Wow. I really like how you connect this to your question in the first stanza... where is the season's sunshine? Very nice.

         *Bullet* In your second stanza, you answer the question with a message of looking beyond these cloudy days with hope that warmer days will follow. Again, very nice!


Suggestions to Consider

         *Bullet* I have no suggestions, but I did try to click the link Mondo under Notes and nothing came up. Just to let you know. *Wink*

Final Thoughts

         I really connected with this piece, Tink! And I agree with you about looking above the clouds. Hope. We need to believe in hope. One day that sunshine will reappear. *Sun*


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
Cubby ")
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