Hi hullabaloo22 , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.


On Title/Subject
Mort is a good title with a twist. It's the name of the main character but also means 'death'. Since he is a mortuary assistant that made me giggle. Nice!


General impressions
A short but sweet story with a nice ending. The only thing is, it's not thrilling, nor is there any suspense. I am not sure why not since the context suggests otherwise.


Favorite Parts
Boby Parts Wanted!
Good price guaranteed.
All makes, all models,
big or small parts accepted.

It's the pun of the story.


Suggestions
If you look at the story again and would understand the mechanics of the story you probably find out why there is no suspense. Perhaps the story up to the point of the ad is just meandering without any real purpose? I am not sure.

It's very difficult to write a real suspense story or thriller. I find it hard also to just find the right parameters of a thrilling story. Thank you for your effort.


Final thoughts
A bit of a flat piece of writing with a good pun at the end. It's worth looking into again and add some more lines to pimp up the story.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .