Hi 💙 Carly , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.


On Title/Subject
Moving on is a very good title for this exquisite short story. The child is moving on in his life and the train is moving on to another destination. Great find.


General impressions
Wow, what a lovely story. Very well written, very vivid images and a good, intelligent flow. Your writing style is very appealing. It is a coming of age story and I loved reading it. Really appealing!


Favorite Parts
Even the hiss as it pulled into the station was a hush.

What a beauty of a sentence.

Suggestions
I know this a personal story where you changed genders for the main character, but if you treat this as fiction it can be part of a longer story. A coming of age story where we follow the boy into adulthood. I would love to read more.

Final thoughts
What a lovely story with good conversations and vivid images and a good tone. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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