Hi Spring in my Sox , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.

On Title/Subject
The title fits its content, the byline is an addition. Because I myself wanted to enter both contests as you did I was intrigued as to what you came up with. I have yet to write my story, but what kind of vessel did you use? I wanted to read.


General impressions
But, alas...I didn't find out. You left me flabbergasted. I have read your story twice and I came up empty. Sorry, dear but I didn't understand your story at all. It's probably because I am an ESL writer and not as familiarized with the English language as a native is, but I didn't understand the Presence inside the singer. Therefore I totally missed out on your story. Leaving me a bit at a loss in this review.

Favorite Parts
Storywise I am at a loss, not understanding what the Presence is, what it did to the singer, etc. What I can see is that you are an accomplished writer. Your lines are smooth and well developed. You obviously know how to write.

Suggestions
Can you be more specific about that Presence? At the beginning of the story, there must be a way to explain what it is or to be more descriptive.

Final thoughts
My loss and probably my fault, but I couldn't make heads nor tails of this story. But with a few adjustments, it's probably a good entry to both contests. I wish you all the best. And thank you for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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