Hi Whitemorn ,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.


On Title/Subject
Intriguing title, I guessed some device from the future. Byline left me guessing indeed. But I wanted to read on.

General impressions
A funny little tale with a twist. Very well told, good structure, descriptions, and flow. Appealing writing style.

Favorite Parts
After reading the quick start guide, Butch carefully unzipped the long black bag which had been placed in specially made foam shipping supports. His eyes lit up like a child's on Christmas morning as he looked down on his lovely new product. He had ordered the Cameron Diaz face because he loved her gigantic smile. There were a variety of faces available and voice packs to match or modify if a person wanted. I mean you could order Katie Perry's face and have Edith Bunker's voice if you wanted to.

Funny!

Suggestions
If you look at the write again you should notice some commas are missing. Corny perhaps, but it takes the reader out of the flow of the story. Perhaps you could download Grammarly, this program does that sort of thing for you. Very convenient. And it's free!

There is no need for that last line at the end, you could easily end the story with the android's words.

Final thoughts
Great story with a good feel to it. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .