Hi Mr. Midnight , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.

On Title/Subject
Great title that fits its content. Real gripping chapter.

General impressions
Very, very good this chapter. I am not a gamer but I felt like I was inside that chopper experiencing the whole thing. Very good use of "Show don't tell". I sure liked this ride.

Favorite Parts
Inside the chopper where Massacre is the gunman firing at will, while the chopper is maneuvering alongside large office buildings. Just like in the movies, I loved it.

Suggestions
* HUD? EM? please explain
* A word is missing in the end part of this sentence? The only indication of the damage [...] from the behind the other buildings

Final thoughts
A very real experience like action-chapter. Great ride inside a chopper in the middle of a war zone, so to speak. Did you experience this yourself in the army or just as a gamer? Just wondering. In any case, it's real-life, or what I imagine would be real-life. Exhausting just reading it. Pace and flow are great.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .