Hi Mr. Midnight , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.

On Title/Subject
I didn't quite get the meaning of this title: Two for two, so that didn't work for me...any other ideas?

General impressions
Another great chapter where Peter regains consciousness and meets up with Merc and surprisingly, Jenny. Another good "Show don't tell". Great descriptions, nice flow, and pace.

Favorite Parts
The bodycheck of Peter's own body was awesome. Very detailed and it had a good vibe to it.

Suggestions
One tiny thing: I just knew [...] their teeth into me they had all the money [...].

Final thoughts
A great chapter with an interesting turn of events (Merc was responsible for the blasts) and reacquaintance with both Merc and Jenny, who is apparently on their side. I want to read on.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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