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Here I come upon a poem in "Invalid Item"  that describes a muse from Greek mythology, though not named, as one who has been described by the narrator as one who's beauty give blind sight. I'm all for that.

I found the meter and rhyme to be quite smooth with handsome words that befit a narrative feel for this theme. I had little trouble with the read but did stumbled each time on my read through of 'like flax most fair' and I don't know what troubled me about it. If it was the introduction, the depiction, or what? It may be fine, but for me as the reader it was the only portion I had to slow over to comprehend.

I do wonder what God you reference in this, as well. We have no names attributed in this text. Not that it is necessary. It briefly made me wonder if we mixed mythology with Christianity. Though, I was certain that was not intended in a contradictory fashion.

I especially enjoyed lingering over the description of her eyes. And I know, limpid is used quite heavily in poetry, but isn't a very apt way to describe eyes that seem liquid and alive? Is akin to, but counter to, shine. If eyes don't beam, they are pools we wish to swim in. I can't off the cuff think of other ways poets indulge in this matter.

It was a pleasure to read and consume this poem.

Brian

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