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 The wondrous night  [E]
It is about my connection to the night.
by Amber
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, ! I discovered this lovely piece on the Read & Review page. *Smile* I also noticed you have just joined the site!
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What I Liked

         *Bullet* I like how you begin this with when you step outside, all your problems disappear. I really connected with that.
         *Bullet* The moon is smiling invokes such a serene feeling in me. Love this line.
         *Bullet* the clock has stopped ticking is another favorite line, as you are referring to stepping into the night and time has stopped. I've experienced this myself. It's such a moment to behold, when the world is quiet and there's nothing but the sounds of the night and inky black ceiling of the sky, dotted by the stars and the moon. It's amazing.
         *Bullet* Another line that struck me was disappearing in the dark. Loved this!
         *Bullet* And also, I go on with the wind.
         *Bullet* Your words paint such vivid visuals from emotions. Very nice!


Suggestions to Consider

         *Bullet* In Line 18 : something yet its nothing its needs an apostrophe as it's a contraction of it is, which you probably already knew but just missed. *Wink* something yet it's nothing
         *Bullet* I have no other suggestions.


Final Thoughts

         Your connection to the night is filled with picturesque visuals brought forth from emotions. You are obviously gifted to be able to pen your feelings so beautifully.

Have a wonderful day! And again, welcome to WDC!


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