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Dear hullabaloo22 ,

Good job with writing to the prompt from WDC Support found in the newsfeed. It's a particularly moving song that seems to stand the test of time and fits naturally around the world.

I think you've captured the anthem that plays well today amid a pandemic that has captured the world. For me, your poem "Invalid Item"  was straightforward in aspect and echoes the song's output about just getting out and having a good time.

I looked for some deeper meaning or personal take away from this and think it would be that the stress of life is forcing the narrator here to mechanically put themselves out there, like 'I suppose I should just go out and have some fun.' I say it like this because it sounds more like someone trapped or mired in misery and it is hard, despite the uplifting song, to shed the weight of the world to find some fun.

For me anyway, that came across as the tone. Hey, wait a minute. Or is it me? Perhaps, the words and tone are felt because they are inside of me? I guess we're all caught in this trap of not knowing where to go to let a little steam off. I think this is where your poem could have sought an opportunity to describe places you can't go...the gym, the clubs and bars, at least without a mask on. And come on, how much can a person work it with limited oxygen?

So, nice work with response to the prompt. I basically wrote something like this. I don't know. I've moved on from and to the next. So much going on with this.

Now, I have to ask. Do you consider yourself a newbie still? I hear people here six months and others say two years? I'm being an actuary of my own reviews. Nevermind. Just wanted to supply my feedback and am rambling now. No Coffee! Bad.

I'm cut off,

Brian

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I apologize for any errors in this review. I'm too far ahead of myself to look back and see if I need to edit anything. *Laugh*


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