Hello MaciM ! I am reviewing your idea for a novel on behalf of The Talent Pond, and also as an assignment for Birthday Bingo to celebrate the 20th birthday of Writing.com.

My Thoughts: I like the premise of your novel. You have some good ideas. This would be an ambitious project but doable with a good outline and good characters, which you seem to have.

My Suggestions: I didn't really like the idea 'a fire that was raring to go'. That somehow didn't read genuine to me, if that makes sense. Flesh out the characters to make them believable, make the settings beyond believable - make them so real that the readers can see themselves in that shop, that school, that centre. I think you get my point.

Welcome to Writing.com. Good luck.








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