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 You Never Walk Alone  [E]
A poem to remind you that you are not alone in whatever you do.
by Aubrey's Play
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Aubrey's Play! I am reviewing this because I discovered it in Random Reviews. *Smile* I'd also like to welcome you to Writing.com, as I see you are quite new!


*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.


What I Liked

         *Bullet* I liked your rhyme scheme of a/b/a/c which is less used in comparison to a/b/c/b. It's refreshing to read something unique. *Smile*
         *Bullet* My favorite lines are:

Sometimes everything will feel like an air raid
But after the storm, after the chaos, your rainbow will shine


Suggestions to Consider

         *Bullet* Not too much to suggest other than you might consider uncapping some of the beginning of your lines that are continuations from the previous lines. One example is:

Every step you take, every decision you make
Is a step closer toward your dream

Perhaps try...

Every step you take, every decision you make
is a step closer toward your dream

It's not really a correction that I'm suggesting, mostly an option. *Wink*


Final Thoughts

         Your message is a strong one. *Smile* Hope you are enjoying the site!


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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