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| (4.5)  Greetings, Storm Machine! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on Random Reviews.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.What I Liked  Great dialogue. I had no problem following along.  Your ending line was the perfect way to end it.  Suggestions to Consider No technical suggestions, but I was a little confused about the biopsy since the doctor wanted to do surgery or else Mrs. Robinson would die. And I very well could be wrong (since I'm not a doctor  ) but I thought a biopsy was done to determine if someone had cancer or if the mass was benign. Or maybe the mass needed to be removed either way or she would die?Final Thoughts Great job with your dialogue! I love this contest. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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