My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. I am reviewing this poem for the Angel Army Newbie Challenge SEP 2020.

THE ESSAY

The essay makes the arugment that women should consider and enter more technological fields.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the author suggested that men should mentor/teach women in the field. For me, I think it's a win/win in that it brings people together to build mutual respect.

POWER OF ARUGMENT

I would suggest using specific examples to add to the power of the arugment. I searched for "women in a tech field personal stories" and I found a bunch of personal stories that would resonate with readers.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a light edit for punctuation. I would also create a few more paragraphs to to highlight the points the author wants to stick out.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's an opportunity to talk about specific tech, but mostly tech is talked about in general.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. There's a lot of potential to be developed. It's a good topic to explore.