A competent mix of imagery and emotion, with a format that works and some well chosen words. You've managed to pack in quite a bit in a few short lines. If this is based on real life, then I hope that writing has helped you heal.

You've asked in your brief description whether you were right to stop writing poems. Well, only you can answer that, actually. These things have to come from within. As a reader, I can give you the feedback that your words did make me think and you have the potential to develop a poetic 'voice' if you choose to do so.

Thanks for sharing this!


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